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    dots Submission Name: I've fixed it....Just for you.dots
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    Author: Xiallia
    ASL Info:    17-F-Missing Osaka[IL]
    Elite Ratio:    1.49 - 3/23/32
    Words: 381
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
    Total Views: 287
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 2542



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    dotsI've fixed it....Just for you.dots
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    You this? Do you know what this is?

    It's my heart..I've sewn up everything!
    I taped everything..
    One by one
    Piece my Piece

    I've fixed it just for you, Love
    Will you take it? Will you Protect it?
    I'll protect yours if you give it to me
    I promise!

    Wait...
    What are you doing? Don't do that!
    You're breaking it again.............

    ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

    Shreds is what he rips it into
    Splatters of blood on the floor and the walls.
    She fixed it just for him.
    Now watch how she falls.

    Blood oozing from her eyes as she cries
    Those crimson red tears.
    "But I've fixed it just for you, Dear"
    Uttered her words.

    Without a care he ripped it more.
    slowly he tore it so she'd watch
    Her precious heart.
    Broken is what he wanted this time.

    Fixed for him is what she did.
    Trash is all you are.
    You deserve what I am doing.
    Ripping to shreds is what you deserve

    Laying there alone
    Shocked and in pain
    Her poor little heart
    Broken again

    Ripping the last piece throwing it away
    The Guy walked away
    No Regret for what he done he left her there
    and He was done.

    The girl soon picked up the pieces
    One by one she did.
    She sewn them together
    She Taped and sewed
    Was all she had.

    Fixed it again...after a year.
    Once again offering her heart
    To a young man
    Eyes dark as night
    He stared to her.

    "Please take care of this..."

    The Dark one took her heart.
    Observed it carefully.
    T'was missing a piece he noticed.

    So from his own...broken and scarred.
    He took a peice from his own and completed her piece

    "It's a perfect match..don't you think?"
    She beamed with Joy
    The Dark one naught a smile


    Together til now is how they are...
    Protecting the heart...of whom they love.

    Tis a warning from there to far.
    "Careful whom you fix your heart for" Is what I warn

    From here I bid a graceful good-bye
    Sayonara my friend
    I'm gunna get pie :]





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      Don't know for sure if that last stanza fits very well with the rest of the piece as its tone is a lot happier than the rest. As a while it has a beautiful dark mood of pain and loss that is expressed wonderfully.
    | Posted on 2010-01-10 00:00:00 | by Maskannai | [ Reply to This ]

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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