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    dots Submission Name: Why?dots

    Author: ModestyB
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 64/38/31
    Words: 149
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    But why, I hear you ask,
    Do you need to leave?
    For all the reasons told
    Youíd never believe
    Pride and fear and hope,
    For a future almost lost
    Happiness is waiting

    Yes. But why? you say.
    You are the past
    Never speak of us again
    There is no we, just me
    My mind is free from you
    Your wiles and lies and cries
    Of fidelity. Find yourself
    And grow, then youíll know Why?

    Donít go, you plead
    I must.
    You wouldnít want me to stay.
    Hating and hurting from all your ways
    Of deceit
    Donít hold me back
    You donít want me
    Only not to be alone

    Tears are no good, cry all you like
    My heart has hardened
    Iíve no feelings left for you
    Forget me, find another to hurt
    Send me no postcard
    Iíve forgotten you already

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      I like this poem. It is rather joyful when one finally realizes that they do not need someone and lets them go.
    | Posted on 2009-11-17 00:00:00 | by LaughingGuest | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice work! People in a relationship should realize that it is a two sided affair, and when one party is neglected or mistreated too often, love and respect switches off, and its over!

    You told a good story here, and did it in a very poetic manner.
    | Posted on 2009-11-15 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      A hard hitting write from you. Very well put together and the flow is very good indeed.

    | Posted on 2009-11-15 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]

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