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    dots Submission Name: Scarsdots
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    Author: SilentDreams42
    Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 38/30/42
    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 611
    Average Vote:    0.0000
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    dotsScarsdots
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    Scars
    Solemnly linger
    Running down the crevices of life
    Leaving us in immense admiration

    Take a journey down these unusual paths
    As memories are forged
    Tampered

    Scars
    They arrive with no conscience




    Submitted on 2009-11-15 18:52:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    1: >_<
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    4: Pretty cool
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      I watched an old movie last night, in which a British and a German soldier fought a sabre duel, then the Brit grew a moustache to hide his scar, and the German changed his hairstyle to show off his scar. The two soldiers became good friends despite two world wars between their countries. They both loved the same girl, but she died (Deborah Kerr), and all their lives, the two men got to know women who looked like the woman they had loved. Kerr played all of the women!

    Pretty cool for an ancient movie. Symbolism of scars, like your poem here!
    | Posted on 2009-11-16 00:00:00 | by Glen Bowman | [ Reply to This ]
      The first three lines are quite riveting and really capture the attention. I have nothing but praise for these three. However, I'm not sure where you're coming from with the admiration, except that maybe if you see someone who is heavily scarred, you might admire them for having survived whatever it was that marked them. Perhaps this could be elaborated on.

    The other lingering confusion I have is with your meaning on a whole. Scars do not depart. They are the one thing that remains when the source of injury has gone. They may fade, but a scar is not truly a scar if it goes away. Perhaps a scar is made without conscience, and continues to exist as a reminder, even if one is not wanted. In this way a scar is without conscience. It is something inanimate superimposed upon something animate, or maybe inside it.

    Best Wishes,
    soul-hugger
    | Posted on 2009-11-15 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]


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