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    dots Submission Name: and burning instead of beauty.dots
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    Author: caster
    ASL Info:    31.M.MO
    Elite Ratio:    3.34 - 136/280/161
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       about: the title and part of the first verse is from the bible.

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    dotsand burning instead of beauty.dots
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    i wish you skies and no oceans,
    and burning instead of beauty.

    the movement of time will not
    slow down your impact.

    burning brite, so brite;
    you're a sun, be a sun of mine.

    broken shorelines and unmapped conversations;
    you're doing just fine.

    not even the thought
    of looking behind you will satisfy.

    commiserate with me, commiserate;
    you're a sun, be a sun of mine.

    i felt your hand from the ceiling
    take hold of mine.

    your enemies stripped nameless
    next to such a holy face.

    draw me close to you, so close;
    you're the sun, be a sun of mine.




    Submitted on 2009-11-16 09:53:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      where in the bible?
    i do not recognize it for a second.
    though im not suggesting i know the bible inside out for a second. not even half a second.

    you're a sun, be a sun of mine

    beautiful sentiment there...
    the repetition makes it even more urgent... sometimes urgency is mandatory.

    dont some planets have more than one sun orbitting them? [i may have made that up lol]
    | Posted on 2010-05-08 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      this is quite pretty. like a love poem prayer of sorts. (if i am reading it right). (and am known to be incredibly wrong most times).

    'i wish you skies and no oceans' is such a wonderful thought. the sky is limitless, and as beautiful and vast as the ocean is, it has a bottom.

    what i get from - and burning instead of beauty - is being humbled. having an understanding of what really matters. (but that's just me).

    i love the refrains w/- you're the sun, be a sun of mine.

    so this is unspecified and i just wanted to say i enjoyed.





    | Posted on 2009-11-16 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]


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