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Self Analysis

Author: Ontlogicalamity
ASL Info:    33/M/NY
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Class/Type: Prose /Longing
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This...this is.. well, this is something I wrote just now. I guess it qualifies as poetic prose. Sometimes you just need to get something out. Hemingway said that the best way to start a new piece is to write the truest sentence you know. In this case it comes at the very end, but it wouldn't make sense without the rest. Thoughts are always welcome. And yes, the pun in the title is intentional.

Self Analysis

What is it I feel? At first it was very strong. It made me want to do things that were silly and useless. It made me think I was in love, and it made me want to tell her so. (I resisted.) But was I really in love? I don't even know what that means, so maybe I was. What is it I feel? When I think of her I see a wonderful future. I see a cozy home on the outskirts of Williamsburg. I see us teaching. She wants to teach kindergarten. I could teach high school math and physics. We would drive each other to work and meet each other for lunch. What is it I feel? It's different now. I no longer want to rush to tell her. I dare not even tell my Self. When Self asks, "do you want her," I reply, "yes, very much." But when Self asks, "do you Love her," I cannot answer. Self asks me that several times each day. I think he would throw a fit if I said no.

Submitted on 2004-07-21 14:14:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  i really enjoy these little snapshots that you write. this is a form of writing that is not given the credit it deserves.. and you do it really well.

i can't point out anyone line that stands out more than the rest.. it all just flows.. giving a great sense of introspection.. the kinds of questions that we all ask ourselves.. and the fact that you didnt end it with a little 'moral of the story' or whathaveyou.. that works best because in reality.. these questions are so difficult to answer. and the separation of the narrator from 'Self' makes it all the more interesting..

anyway.. i'm rambling and this is probably the most pointless comment you've gotten but i just wanted to let you know i enjoyed reading this.
| Posted on 2004-07-30 00:00:00 | by girlinthephoto | [ Reply to This ]
  I couldn't believe it when I read it because that sort of thing is so true and so easy to relate to. You were able to grasp the conept of your feelings and write them plain as day...and yet I still consider it a beautiful work of art. I love the doube personality, as well, because the way you're describing the doubt is so much more descriptive.
| Posted on 2004-07-21 00:00:00 | by Checkered Cow | [ Reply to This ]
  i know how it feels like to just have to write something down no matter what, first of all i love the doble personality, i think thats a great way to self analizes yourself, , ofcourse the last line is my favorite, awsome thought
| Posted on 2004-07-21 00:00:00 | by ALURIO | [ Reply to This ]
  ok, Dude how many years have I known you? in all that time this is the most honest thing I think I have ever seen you produce, seeing as how we held a prior conversation about the afformentioned topic.
Like I've said let it flow. That refers to your writing and to your subject in the piece above. LEt it flow

p.s. the occasional shot of jack or tequilla dont hurt ::::::winks,evil grin,and a nod::::
| Posted on 2004-07-21 00:00:00 | by Mithrandir | [ Reply to This ]

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