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    dots Submission Name: Did You Wish To Haunt Me?dots
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    Author: smexybabe0101
    ASL Info:    15/Female/Penarth:L
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 25/30/66
    Words: 205
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDid You Wish To Haunt Me?dots
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    I dream of you,
    Screaming at me at the top of your lungs,
    Shattering my heart which you can do very well,
    Treating me like I’m nothing but a piece of filth
    Thrashing out on me as if I’m just a punching bag,
    Cheating on me as if you didn’t have enough already,
    Shoving me around as if I’m just another game...

    When I should be dreaming of him,
    Holding me tight and never letting me go,
    Protecting me from all the harmful things in life,
    Kissing me as if our lives depended on it,
    Caring for me like we had known each other our whole lives,
    Trusting me and letting me be able to trust him,
    Loving me as if he’s never loved anyone before...

    Did you know your actions would lead to my nightmares and greatest fears?
    Did you even think that I would cry myself to sleep at night dreading your return?
    Did you never feel compassion and always feel hatred?
    Did you not get taught how to treat a girl, especially your girlfriend?
    Did you ever even love me at all?

    Or was it all a big lie, and a game that you just had to win?




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      Great heart felt write....

    defining love and what love means will always end in tears if it is defined by this ridiculous male/female advert propaganda ... and while we are searching for this ultimate thrill in life ( you know the one which they said we could get and or buy ) .. eg love... it seems we are prepared to use it, in the same way we use television, fashion and burger king..

    In a way you have to feel a bit sorry for the modern idea of a male.

    Women for their part have been lucky. Society defined them way back in the centuries, gave them their role and basically limited them, and now that same society does not know how to push women even further. Society has basically exhausted all the limitations it placed on women but women are constantly exceeding their role... and society does not know quite what to do about it; because the definitions still remain and are locked into its structure... hence the confusion you see when a woman reaches a peek... no one its quite sure how to handle it. ( eg must have slept her way to the top )

    But a mans role was handed to him as being limitless and being responsible for everything, taught that he could have everything; and now, given the limits of that everything, it is not enough and your average dumb [censored] male does not know what to do about it... their only option is to resort to primal need... a woman.. or women....

    Nope 90% of men do not know when they are well off or have any clue as to what it means to love a woman, just one woman. They are too busy being men, and that by societies defenition means having everything....

    viscous circle, but still you have to feel sorry for them ( a little bit ) LOL

    Most of them do not have the slightest clue, that their entire existence is dependent on the love of a woman. Instead they treat them like cars, or a new toy..... most men grow up the hard way and leave a trail of destruction behind them..... such is the world we live in now...

    the future is and always has been "feminine"

    On the flip side... I say this as a man who cannot find a woman who does not expect me to fulfill my role as a "modern male".. eg.. having everything and being limitless..... and so the perpetuation continues

    Well there you go Abbie... your poem must have struck a chord... good poem HUH :)
    | Posted on 2009-11-21 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]
      Dam girl! This is rough... kudos for sharing! And I hope you are no longer with this person for I know how it is! I also know how hard it is to leave when your heart doesn't want to but your mind is pleading with you!! Hang in there and things will get better

    Jackz

    Thanks for sharing
    | Posted on 2009-11-20 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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