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    dots Submission Name: Modern Romance (Dance The Interstate Skies)dots

    Author: jayisademon
    ASL Info:    22/M/SoILL
    Elite Ratio:    4.24 - 129/81/88
    Words: 263
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsModern Romance (Dance The Interstate Skies)dots

    Meet me in the bushes,
    tonight, after dark,
    where are two souls go to meet,
    and where they both ignite,
    without the slightest spark.

    Here, in this pale moonlight,
    and heavy soundtrack,
    of the evening's traffic,
    I will kiss you hard,
    and break your brittle little bones.

    Two lovers,
    Two by two,
    We'll sneak by shadowy pulpit,
    on the evening's air,
    to the land of young lust,
    where we will lay bare.

    Soft lips, softer legs,
    the inside of the thigh,
    all the better to build a lie,
    I've seen God in a dirty washout,
    this is action that he can't espy.

    Bitten mouth, swollen collagen,
    tickled pink,
    darling you hurt my head,
    spinning, dizzying,
    Modern Romance, no time to think.

    Head first,
    our love is an abyss,
    I've lost all of my change,
    Tossed it all in the liquid,
    please let's get double return,
    on a singular wish.

    We were never taught,
    anything of mature love.

    Tonight, on the overpass darling.
    Where two lovers, will meet,
    in disallusion,
    imagining seclusion,
    "Does he know"
    "Does she know"
    is this all true?
    Hold my hand over the guardrail of the interstate,
    Our love is true tonight, at least,
    Betwixt passion, and regret,
    we danced with the devil,
    headlights, dance over our fate.

    Eternally, we have cast off our demons,
    We have made a bitter peace,
    cheated by the big bad world,
    and teased at the affliction of a soft smile,
    we hit the pavement hard,
    holding our gentle embrace,
    drug mile after sensual mile.

    Submitted on 2009-11-16 20:24:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Meet me in the bushes,
    tonight, after dark,
    where are Our [?] two souls go to meet,
    and where they both ignite,
    without the slightest spark.

    And that was about the only thing I noticed, because from there on out I was captivated.
    This is SO different from anything ive ever read. So different actually, that at first I just started at the computer screen for a moment- then reread it.
    The ending was so surprising! I definetly didnt think they were going to [if I got this right] jump onto the highway and be dragged by cars.
    In honesty im actually still spinning with the strangness, yet dramatic beauty, of this poem.

    Awesome job,
    | Posted on 2009-11-17 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]

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