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All the world has to offer


Author: MysterydarkPoet
ASL Info:    20/f/Aust
Elite Ratio:    3.13 - 157 /295 /173
Words: 145
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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All the world has to offer



Consider me blind
The day i wake and my eyes gaze
Upon everything that is
But not you.
Because it's not seeing
If I can't see you.
 
With everything the world
Has placed upon my plate
From the most radiant sunrise
To the softest and sweetest of lullabies
I have never stumbled upon something
As So brilliantly captivating as you-

Rigid and firmly in place
My heart will never stray,
Only ever beating continously overflowing my love
Into your cupped hands-

So freeze me where I stand,
Should the moment come
Where my love just spills
Into empty and hollow drains
That only home sorrow and pain

magically and mysteriously 
I'm locked and intertwined 
into your life-
Should I never see,
Or my heart fail to beat
let my breath become the wind
And carry me to stay
Forever in your heart. 




Submitted on 2009-11-17 06:45:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I like the title All the world has to offer, kinda depressing but... perfect title.

I like how you use your "overflowing love" as a liquid and then at the end of the poem it becomes air, or as breath that you want to be carried. Thats nice.

Theres always something in your poems that is a single idea or stream of conciousness that blows me away. Your ideas are always seperate in the ways you present them, I love that.

I could publish a book with the amount of your work I favourite. Amazing!
| Posted on 2009-11-23 00:00:00 | by MidnightSun89 | [ Reply to This ]
  awwww omg this is an amazing write so ... soo... awww I can't believe how perfect this peice is!!!! I am literally beyond speechless

Jackz

Deff. going into my fav's
| Posted on 2009-11-20 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
  I like it a lot. The emotion behind this is wise, or at least feels wise. You are very insightful to be able to write something like this. The love that this speaks of is a very pure one and hopefully will not be wasted. I really like it.
| Posted on 2009-11-19 00:00:00 | by LiChan | [ Reply to This ]


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