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    dots Submission Name: If I Could Cut With My Mind...dots
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    Author: bloddyrazorgirl
    ASL Info:    18/f/az
    Elite Ratio:    1.14 - 41/35/40
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Being a Teen
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    Description:
       got mad at my principal and i felt like cutting, wrote this instaed


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    dotsIf I Could Cut With My Mind...dots
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    it's been a long time
    since I've felt like this
    I'm thinking I'm going
    A little bit insane
    Staring at you
    And all your lame rules
    I don't give a shit
    That this is your school
    You're making me
    Want to scream
    Or make little red
    Razor blade scars
    All over my arms
    And if I could
    Cut with my mind
    There'd be crimson blood
    All over your desk




    Submitted on 2009-11-17 19:21:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wait so who do you hate? Them or yourself?
    I'm confused. How about this. Stop hurting people. Cutting is the most immature bull[censored] on the face of this earth aside babies screaming because they have no words. Just stop doing it. Go write about birds.
    Also whoever this is about or aimed at...Just get rid of them. You live life once. Don't subject yourself to bull[censored] you don't have to.

    As far as this poem goes it actually reads through very nicely. Flyleaf style.
    Stop cutting - Keep writing.
    | Posted on 2010-09-26 00:00:00 | by idonthaveaname | [ Reply to This ]


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