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    dots Submission Name: The Silencedots
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    Author: ImperfectGirl1
    ASL Info:    19 f USA
    Elite Ratio:    2.66 - 33/57/33
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Silencedots
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    The silence grows rapidly
    Causing thoughts to run
    Across the soundless meadow,
    Missing the sound
    Of your voice
    In my ear
    As you whispered
    The things that bring
    A never-failing smile
    To my face,
    Missing the echo
    Of your laugh
    As it bounces
    Off the walls
    When we do
    Something stupid.
    The silence has taken
    Away all the things
    That make the day
    Well worth living.
    How do I make
    The silence bring
    That all back to me?




    Submitted on 2009-11-17 22:32:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is such a good poem i love the harmonized begining and ending and your articulation causes me to read two poems; one of silence and one of you. im sorry that this happened to you at least it s on paper and not bounceing around in your mind... kinda
    | Posted on 2009-11-21 00:00:00 | by Cure | [ Reply to This ]


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