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    dots Submission Name: Bulimia of the Souldots

    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    17/Female/TMON
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 112/217/289
    Words: 303
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 647
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       This one means alot to me, it is take from quite a few different aspects of my life, and well hopefully you can see every layer i tried to throw into the mix.

    Any suggestions critisisms and sympathies are welcome! :)

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    dotsBulimia of the Souldots

    Keep moving
    Into the night

    Step lightly
    Donít fight me
    Itíll all turn out alright

    This anger
    Is not real
    Let is pass

    You canít take this
    Donít fake this
    As realities clash

    You canít shove this down my throat
    Itís a reflex, inevitably I choke
    And spit it back up
    Making a mess

    It would have been easier for you
    To draw me in lightly
    Making me want it, and love it
    Until I accepted it on my own

    But I broke away from your ways
    Esophagus worn
    From access vomiting
    And contracting
    To rid myself of you

    And if you do not stop now
    For long enough to let me heal,
    I will rupture
    Pouring insides all across my tattered life

    And I will die
    In the moment
    All of it your fault

    And everyone will see
    What monsters you are

    To force your little girl
    To be something she is not
    Someone she can never be

    No matter how hard you pray
    You will never make it up
    To yourselves
    And surely not to me

    You were wrong
    The words whisper
    Under your skull

    Broken body
    Found alone
    With traces of your rules
    In little puddles of puke
    All around

    The death was agonizing
    Nothing could have hurt her more
    Like she suffocated
    Underneath all your standards
    And her responsibilities
    Who she was supposed to be

    Who was she supposed to be?
    Left alone to her own devices
    Shoved one finger down her throat
    To rid herself of your ideals
    With one final heave
    She became herself
    And died before ever getting the chance
    To spread her wings
    And fly free
    Without the troubles of the world
    Weighing her down

    Submitted on 2009-11-18 06:44:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, I can relate to this completely. It seems like the story of my life. I couldn't even go through it to find anything to critic, I was stuck, I don't think I could have stopped reading if I tried. I loved it, and I loved the comparison throughout it.
    | Posted on 2009-11-19 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]

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