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    dots Submission Name: who am i dots
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    Author: Cure
    ASL Info:    19/M/tucstoned Az
    Elite Ratio:    4.26 - 18/11/11
    Words: 233
    Class/Type: Riddle/Me
    Total Views: 79
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1431



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    dotswho am i dots
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    "who am i?"
    i say...
    why do i stand here today?
    configured and shaped in the manner of which i portray?
    "who am i?"
    i say...
    what has made me this way?
    why must i live in such dismay because i ask of things this way?
    why must i say what i say but can never truly convey the correct image i wish to display?
    "who am i?"
    I say...
    why do i act this way?
    why cant i say what i wish to say!
    why cant i be the entity i see when you ask of me to discribe the being of witch you see?
    "who am i?"
    I say...
    is there a difference between mine and yours personality or are we simply at different points of view, gazing apon acuality?
    "what am i?"
    I say...
    -a closer question to rationality-
    is there really a difference in individuality?,
    or is there only simularities distanced by causality?
    "Who am I?"
    I say...
    -now i see-
    I am me, a mere widow to reality, it is when you combin reality with my acuality to form the physicality of me; that my impression is lessoned by your interpretation of my three dimensional representation...
    the perplexity of my entity can never be fully seen; because there is no me!...
    "My name is sam"
    and this is what i see...





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    ||| Comments |||
      This is absolutely magnificent...the flow, the play on words, and the imagery...
    You had a few typos..but meh... Im not grammar teacher... Anywho...
    I verra much enjoyed this peice...
    ~Beautifully Corrupt
    | Posted on 2009-12-09 00:00:00 | by DearlyDeparted | [ Reply to This ]
      This poem has the best point. I question that everyday- who am I? All I can see is this conformed stranger in myself somtimes and I wonder if there is a 'me' at all.
    [Though im not very normal :p]

    Anyways, I loved the line 'configured and shaped in the manner of which i portray?'

    Same offer goes as last time, if you want me to bash just ask.

    -Safire
    | Posted on 2009-11-22 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]


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