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    dots Submission Name: Pointless Waydots
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    Author: WhiteTiger
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    2.88 - 17/16/11
    Words: 114
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPointless Waydots
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    I feel their stares and watchful eyes
    the stinging words of plain despise
    I cringe within and look away
    The shunning growing day by day

    Of course the pain is within my mind
    no one hates, they're rather kind
    but behind a smile, a painted face
    I feel alone and out of place

    This place I'm in and the people too
    I long for something else and new
    A place to stay where I belong
    A life to live, is that so wrong?

    This massive lie I try to live
    nothing comes of what I give
    The hours tick as time crawls by
    In this moment that I live to die




    Submitted on 2009-11-18 12:04:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I love this. Seem's as though the "watchful eyes" are keeping you from being yourself..In which I can relate. I like your scheme here. Very nicccee!
    | Posted on 2009-11-19 00:00:00 | by Randa04 | [ Reply to This ]
      so cool wt..
    | Posted on 2009-11-18 00:00:00 | by dewith | [ Reply to This ]


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