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    dots Submission Name: electromagnetic radiation of a single wavelengthdots
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    Author: Paradox
    ASL Info:    33/m/Earthbound
    Elite Ratio:    4.58 - 1055/434/90
    Words: 230
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 819
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 3552



    Description:
       This was the hardest poem ever to edit (god I hate that stupid code) but I feel that the fonts and layout used are very important in this piece. So I hope you like it and please leave some feedback, even if you don"t.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotselectromagnetic radiation of a single wavelengthdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Life

    Needs

    Death

    Needs

    Life


    Itís a delicate tapestry

    Monochrome

    Black and white


    Life

    Needs

    Death

    Needs

    Life


    There is no shadow

    Darkness

    Without light


    Life

    Needs

    Death

    Needs

    Life


    Itís a silent embrace

    Melting

    Of day and night


    Life

    Needs

    Death

    Needs

    Life


    There is no escape

    Still

    Try if you like


    Life

    Needs

    Death

    Needs

    Life


    Itís heaven relived

    Simmering

    Translucent sight


    Life

    Needs

    Death

    Needs

    Life


    Women must breed

    Power

    And men must fight


    Life

    Needs

    Death

    Needs

    Life







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      I now know want total irrelevance is and was. LOL
    | Posted on 2013-08-02 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this piece of urs, Paradox! An entangling of opposites, within opposites, within... My favorite part was "there is no shadow/ darkness without light"! You spin us in a spiral. Brilliant! Bravo! Will get to more of ur work, soon... Check on more of my shite, maybe at least one will show u I have talent (like u) :-D

    Keep writing!
    Shalini

    | Posted on 2012-12-01 00:00:00 | by sbridges | [ Reply to This ]
      @lori Electromagnetic radiation of a single wavelength is one of the definitions of the word monochrome. That's what this is: a simple sketch drawn with an old pencil on dusty paper. :) So yeah, if you view life from above, that's what we do here: we breed and we fight and power is at the center of this. I know this is a simplistic view point but that is intentional, in a sketch the most you hope to do is to catch a certain thing, maybe exaggerate it, the one that made you wanna draw it in the first place. The rest is left empty like a piece of old paper...
    | Posted on 2012-11-24 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Here I am reading along, enjoying this piece very much might I add, then


    There is no shadow

    and I think, chills, haunting, then continuing on with this idea, no light in the darkenss, the light that creates a shadow. Nice. Interesting. Strong.



    Itís a silent embrace


    Melting


    Of day and night

    Night divides the day, try to run try to hide
    :) hee hee

    Women must breed


    Power


    And men must fight

    I had to re read the whole thing when I read this part, was like whuh huh??? this is wrapping it all up? Women, power Man, fight.

    Thought it might have something to do with this natrual thing you are painting here, this light and this dark and these laws that govern.

    Would you care to elaborate?
    | Posted on 2011-07-04 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a GREAT MEDITATION Paradox!

    It's the rhythm of breath with smiles to share ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-07-02 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      This hurts my brain in really enjoyable kind of way.

    Initially I'm reminded of a Tool song called Disgustipated that features the repeating lines:

    "This is necessary. Life feeds on life feeds on life feeds on life feeds on. This is necessary."

    And so on.

    Then I'm drawn in by the format, looking for other patterns.

    Monochrome Darkness Melting
    Still Simmering Power

    Monochrome Power
    Simmering Darkness
    Still Melting

    I like the balance throughout, and the examination of balance within. Black and white, light and shadow, men and women, power and progeny. The unavoidable un-escapable cycles that we all float on top of, carrying life and death from start to finish.

    I'm sure there's more to your meaning and would love to know what your thoughts were going into this.
    | Posted on 2009-11-20 00:00:00 | by RisingSon | [ Reply to This ]
      i totaly agree the font and format do more then just ease the interpretation. it gives it tangibility and image but i wanted more comparisons and connections to tell the truth lol
    | Posted on 2009-11-19 00:00:00 | by Cure | [ Reply to This ]


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