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    dots Submission Name: The Meadowdots
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    Author: WhiteTiger
    ASL Info:    18
    Elite Ratio:    2.88 - 17/16/11
    Words: 385
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
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    dotsThe Meadowdots
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    Cold and frigid, breath come ridged
    Stiff and waiting for daylights breaking
    Stretched out upon the dewy grass,
    I sigh two words of joy ďAt lastĒ

    Banishing the chilly night
    Comes the blinding morning light
    Rising above the mountains high
    My eyes reflect a crimson sky

    The sun peak up from above the trees
    Warming up their frozen leaves
    The meadow is bathed in a stunning light
    Hardly words for such a sight

    The golden glow-a sunny kiss
    I smile at the quiet bliss
    A breeze blows in across the way
    The yellow flowers begin to sway

    With lolling eyes and resting head
    I lay back in the grass my bed
    To dream land I fall in deep
    Already gone, seduced by sleep

    In my meadow
    My meadow

    Itís my meadow, dark, a winter scene
    Dreaming of a winter dream
    I see in the black of night
    A small figure against the ground of white

    Itís me, a child, six at that
    With rosy and tiny hat
    Hidden behind a leaf bare tree
    I watch the younger version of me

    The moon is full with a pallid glow
    Illuminating the fallen snow
    In the biting wind the flakes swirl- I prance
    Amidst them in their celestial dance

    Then the dream blurs, the dark melts away
    Replaced by the blare of day
    Though still asleep for now its spring
    With blooming tulips and leaves of green

    And there I am yet again
    No longer six but now Iím ten
    With pants rolled high, wading in the creek
    Pretending perhaps, Iím in the ocean deep

    A smile flirts across my face
    And my grown up heart begins to race
    Seeing these memories in my dreams
    Is it as real as it seems?

    But then, I open my sleep eyes
    Reflecting now a bright blue sky
    Standing up with a heavy yawn
    A tiny smirk- the dream not quite gone

    Looking around in my perfect meadow
    Speckled with flowers of yellow
    Grass dark green and the creek crystal clear
    Reflective like a magic mirror

    This perfect world and all it holds
    Treasured memories of the untold
    My little place since I seven
    In my little slice of heaven




    Submitted on 2009-11-18 13:29:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      sweet but you need to a look a litte closer


    This perfect world and all it holds
    Treasured memories of the untold
    My little place since I was seven
    In my little slice of heaven
    | Posted on 2009-11-20 00:00:00 | by littlepoet | [ Reply to This ]


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