Where were you?

Author: ModestyB Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 64 /38 /31 Words: 113

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Where were you?

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Where were you last night when I came looking for you? Were you with her again Or, this time, someone new ? I need to know, if I’m to be The one left behind, once more. Trust you, you say How can I, I reply How many times have I been betrayed How many have there been Since we married? You can leave now I’ve had all I can take Go to her or go to hell I don’t care anymore Take what you need Just leave me my pride.

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very stong emotion, i can relate...im sorry you've had to feel this pain *hugs*

| Posted on 2009-12-28 00:00:00 | by vLame | [ Reply to This ]

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