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    dots Submission Name: Puppet girldots
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    Author: sugar_sweet
    ASL Info:    20/ Female/ Canada
    Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 11/8/15
    Words: 145
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPuppet girldots
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    see her smile
    see her dance
    ignore the strings
    and the unpleasant things

    watch as she twirls and pirouettes
    watch as she bends to their will
    they laugh and cheer
    never looking into her eyes
    they ignore the fear

    She wishes she knew what would make her happy
    despirately she chases that feeling
    but all she knows is what they tell her
    and her world is bound by their strings

    over the years the face in the mirror begins to crack
    as she becomes aware of the truth
    the strings tug and manipulate
    never relenting
    never fraying

    day after day she dances
    looking in the mirror night after night
    and seeing the cracks
    waitikng for the day
    when it will be her turn
    the day she will be freed from the strings
    and granted her pair of wings




    Submitted on 2009-11-19 14:59:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love how you wrote this. reminds of my own life.
    | Posted on 2009-11-22 00:00:00 | by franki jorge | [ Reply to This ]


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