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    dots Submission Name: The dance of secrets and liesdots

    Author: sugar_sweet
    ASL Info:    20/ Female/ Canada
    Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 11/8/15
    Words: 129
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 555
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsThe dance of secrets and liesdots

    he lies
    she pretends not to know
    The secrets and lies come out
    when she can no longer let her sorrow go

    He yells
    She cries
    He begs forgiveness
    a little part of her dies

    her heart turns to stone
    for only a day or two
    she pushes him away
    he doesnt know what to do

    they talk
    he makes his promises
    he will never hurt her again
    she wants to believe him

    Once she can bear it
    she will let him back in
    her trust will come back
    it would seem they both win

    a couple months later
    it starts once again
    hes lying
    shes crying
    this dance will not end
    the dance of secret and lies
    destroys a couple again

    Submitted on 2009-11-19 15:02:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really enjoyed this poem. A lot of us have been in that position before, with boyfriend or girlfriend cheating.

    I loved the rhythm of this poem. It was almost like hearing a song in my head, really.

    Keep them coming.
    | Posted on 2009-11-19 00:00:00 | by Vanion | [ Reply to This ]

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