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    dots Submission Name: Open Window Fantasiesdots
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    Author: jayisademon
    ASL Info:    22/M/SoILL
    Elite Ratio:    4.24 - 129/81/88
    Words: 174
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 513
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1346



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    dotsOpen Window Fantasiesdots
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    Pass by an open window,
    there's hope in the air.
    Should you climb through,
    or gently pass on?

    What's waiting?
    Earthly delights,
    or Spiritual Leanings.

    What's Your Fancy?
    Or does it rely more on,
    What's Your fantasy?

    Do you hope that the devil moves soft?
    Let's you taste-without reprocussion-of the delicious forbidden fruit.

    Or,
    Do you hope that God will electrify?
    Blind your eyes with revelations,
    before unseen.

    Weigh your options heavily,
    And swiftly too.
    The window will only remain open so long.
    And winter is fast approaching.

    Soon, the November drafts will lead to December coughs,
    and January's Burials.

    Are you more man or beast?
    Should you satisfy lust?
    Or, prolong the gratification of love?

    Don't forget you can continue to pass..

    Wander aimlessly,
    Purgatorio, or something of the like.
    Hang in limbo,
    Maybe it's not that forlorn,
    and maybe solitude is what you crave.

    But if there's one thing I know,
    it's that solitude doesn't mourn around a lonely grave.





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