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    dots Submission Name: Meltdots
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    Author: Emerging Soul
    ASL Info:    48/VERY female/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    4.36 - 1240/1114/244
    Words: 17
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 849
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    Bytes: 105



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    dotsMeltdots
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    You melt in my mouth
    Like M&M candies
    In bursts of pleasure
    And I savor each one




    Submitted on 2004-07-21 15:29:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very nice, simple and steamy. I like candy and sex compared to each other, always thought that was a hot image. The last line is questionable only because it leaves somethingto be desired, like I want to hear a little more about, er, oh, nevermind... Maybe I just need more smut in my life! Sweet write!
    | Posted on 2004-07-23 00:00:00 | by Casper | [ Reply to This ]
      'I smell sex and candy...' - and I can't remember now which song this is. anyway nice little minimalistic piece. very sexy.
    | Posted on 2004-07-22 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      I quite like this one. It's a great slice of minimalism. Birsts of pleasure and flavor make sex and candy are a nice combo indeed.
    | Posted on 2004-07-21 00:00:00 | by cuddledumplin | [ Reply to This ]
      hello from a fellow Wisconsinette. Didn't know you are from the cheese state. chocolate turns on the juices in some people, but not me.
    | Posted on 2004-07-21 00:00:00 | by hotrodruss | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a nice little minimalist simile. I think that green M and M's are the best. They just look better to me. But they DO melt in your hands, too.
    | Posted on 2004-07-21 00:00:00 | by Black Rock Tractor | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, sex + candy- isn't the first time i've seen this- but it came rather unexpected- i read the description after the short writing. Powerful.
    | Posted on 2004-07-21 00:00:00 | by RequiemOfDreams | [ Reply to This ]


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