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    dots Submission Name: Following the Stardots
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    Author: stonewashblues
    Elite Ratio:    4.74 - 18/7/6
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsFollowing the Stardots
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    I have a path of sliding stones, a direction
    that moves beneath my feet and spins me
    while I struggle North, holding a star in sight
    despite not knowing where I'm going.

    Oh please don't let it lead me to Bethlehem,
    to some barnful of miracles and bastard babies
    scattered on the floor to trip over and kick away.
    Spare me those 'wise' men bearing 'gifts' I have no use for;
    Just progress him three decades and nail him up today...
    I know I could use a little Easter in my heart,
    as well as an egg salad sandwich.




    Submitted on 2009-11-20 15:09:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      At first read, and being a Christian man, I was put off by this. After re-reading it and really analyzing it, I find it is not a knock agains Christ but a cry for resurection and I have felt that way many times. I loved the way you ended it with the egg salad sandwich part, it lightened the piece masterfully. This is a very good piece and I enjoyed it immensly.

    yours in Christ
    Ben
    | Posted on 2009-12-16 00:00:00 | by BenCollier | [ Reply to This ]


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