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    dots Submission Name: Baptisms Of Lightdots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 207
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsBaptisms Of Lightdots
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    Forms of the covenant sea
    The ever dazzled
    Scatter and inscribes its constant promise

    I stand before it
    The deciphered intention
    To augment the beatings of its heart

    And the fountain wash swells in its solar out-pouring
    The reminder of Aeons
    Caught by its wings

    And I burst, burst out upon its flowering verge
    A secondís enraptured trance
    Fills the solitary breath of the Universe

    A flick of colour to paint the sky
    A nuisance falls on a green silken leaf
    The spectrum of its rainbow; touches down

    And the magnitude of its beauty
    All around you
    All around you, where the stars in their heavens, wheel

    And the power in the intricacies they perceive
    Render to my pulse their quiet revelation
    In baptisms of light

    Though lost in haze greys of days forgetfulness
    Torn by those dark eyes
    Ripped by a compassion of sorrow

    Sometimes never to see
    How its deliverance by converse can be
    Always mine

    And the magnitude of its beauty
    All around you
    All around you, where the stars in their heavens, wheel

    They return to me
    In their reminder of Aeons out-pouring
    Baptisms of light





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      This is an absolutely beautiful poem. Great vocabulary, dear! There's honestly nothing wrong with it, I find. Lovely flow to it, and it all makes complete sense to me. This is one of the greatest poems I have read, and I LOVE IT.


    -Abbie
    | Posted on 2009-11-21 00:00:00 | by smexybabe0101 | [ Reply to This ]


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