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    dots Submission Name: Your Eyesdots
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    Author: all2rest
    Elite Ratio:    3.75 - 30/40/34
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsYour Eyesdots
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    Your eyes are a world all their own.

    Two soft globes circling mine, your constant moons.

    Satellites to the beautiful soul they call home.


    Dwelling inside, a mystery resides.

    A mystery that I never will know.

    Puzzling me to a great extent.

    Sharing a love that never ceases to grow.


    The space between us is always too much.

    A lightyear passed today.

    At least that's what it seems like when I miss your eyes.

    When they don't shine towards my way.


    Starlight starbright shine over me this very night.

    Guide me to your heart always.

    Where my love has longed to stay.




    Submitted on 2009-11-21 01:23:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Well Greg, I think you did a fine job on this write,it was filled with hope an yet longing to share what within the soul, keep up the good writes,cause I enjoyed reading this
    adnil
    | Posted on 2009-11-23 00:00:00 | by adnil | [ Reply to This ]
      this is really good, idk if you read my poem called; "in her eyes" but if you did you'd know why im jealous, lol but regardless i love the theme expecially the begining analogy thanks; you helped put another perspective on my point of view, its so hard to articulate this particular feeling.
    | Posted on 2009-11-21 00:00:00 | by Cure | [ Reply to This ]


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