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    dots Submission Name: the love you give to me.dots
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    Author: Cure
    ASL Info:    24/M/BakerCity, Or
    Elite Ratio:    4.69 - 26/23/15
    Words: 265
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 671
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1371



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    dotsthe love you give to me.dots
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    You are The love that surrounds me where ever I may beÖ


    There is a love I know of, that shines so strong it brightens the entirety of me, and this is what that light gives to me;

    It is the prettiest of flowers: my Rosa, lying here next to me.

    This love that envelops me to a point of endless ecstasy, is like a never ending dance in the rain with you, I am always and forever connected to you, this is the place I go to whenever I hold you...

    This love that drives your compassion; so strong as to go far beyond the passion of the simple little poet I may be.
    I canít even begin to see all the love you give to me, continuously, day after day you show me the true beauty of your entity in every which way one could possibly imagine, there is no limit to your compassion.

    And yet you give it all to me?...

    There are no words that can describe the excitement that bursts inside me whenever you grab a hold of my body and squeeze tightly, romantically implying the endless eternity of this moment: that is you simply lying here next to me...

    this love that surrounds me wherever I may be is the greatest thing that has ever happened to me, and this I know to be true for wherever I go, what ever I do, I always feel right next to you...




    Submitted on 2009-11-21 03:20:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This could go under some editing
    not the words but the structure
    you should revise it to make it flow a little better
    give it a more generic rhyming scheme and it would raise up the readers ability to read it
    which means they're more likely to understand the words and the poetic devices
    besides that I enjoyed it better than most stuff on this site
    it's a really good lyric
    and a very very good description of the feeling of love

    -ODF
    | Posted on 2010-09-10 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]


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