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    dots Submission Name: in her eyes (original)dots
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    Author: Cure
    ASL Info:    24/M/BakerCity, Or
    Elite Ratio:    4.69 - 26/23/15
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    In her eyes i lose everything...

    As time seems to stop i try finding myself, lost within a mist of true happiness. As she gazes into my eyes it reaches to every inch of my soul, leaving me breathlessly questioning everything...

    i continue to remain speecless, searching for the words to truly express this moment; i notice her face seems calm and expressionless, but her eyes say everything when words are worthless.

    (her intensive beauty seems to paralyze even my heart!)

    as i am left mezmerized by true perfection i find myself locked in a state of amazment at the discovery of heaven.
    for within your eyes i find a world where life is true bliss and reality is love beyond ecstasy...




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      This is truly outstanding, exquisitely well expressed. To truly define the moment of being held captive and to show such descriptions you have made her sound beyond heaven perfectly sculpted by an artist unknown and to catch this image is beautiful. I really enjoyed this thanks for sharing.


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    | Posted on 2009-11-24 00:00:00 | by faideddarkness | [ Reply to This ]


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