Snare c. by ruejacobs on 11/22/09 at 11 p.m.

Author: ruejacobs ASL Info:    39/feminazi/Gehenna Elite Ratio:    4.82 - 619 /473 /167 Words: 79

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Snare c. by ruejacobs on 11/22/09 at 11 p.m.

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for my failed step-father Snared the rabbit at last Oh, skinny broken necked And wasted limb Snow white fur and blood stained claws God is god is a snared rabbit Diana and her tiny bow Curling mischievous smile She crouched behind the leaves And her aim was true She had nothing to gain And her sister had nothing to lose And that is why, rabbit, you have to go Into the pot with you.

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Rabbits. They always remind me of two things: Pink Floyd, y'know 'Run, rabbit run, dig that hole, forget the sun and when at last the work is done don't sit down it's time to dig another one...' and my father who forced me to go rabbit hunting with him when I was little. It's actually quite an awful process: how they go out in the field when its dark and suddenly flick on their flashlights to blind the poor things long enough to shoot 'em. Never seemed fair...and then the butchering! It's hard to look away when you see the loose skin of an animal being pulled from its body like arm from a shirt-sleeve. Ugh. Anyway. This read like a riddle of sorts that I'm not sure I actually found the answer to, but I think I did. It's a bit morbid, a bit hard: like someone who smiles with clenched teeth or tells a joke without smiling. I especially liked this bit God is god is a snared rabbit and how it fit seamlessly into the thoughts that surround it.

| Posted on 2009-11-24 00:00:00 | by Lady of Shalott | [ Reply to This ]

(sad face). i am a horrible hunter. i think if it came down to it, i would have to turn vegetarian. obviously, too, i would have to be a better gardener. i just can't imagine taking a life. so prepackaged already cut-up meat will have to do. it just takes the hard/heart out of it. rabbit as metaphore? step-father stew? about as nonsensical as i can get. all of my comments are pretty useless anyway. so there ya go. hiya. biya. bibbity-boppity-boo.

| Posted on 2009-11-24 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]

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