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Old Toy


Author: CrypticBard
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Old Toy


`



as a child once to a favoured toy
countless hours of pristine joy
but specifications of "growed up" ploy
memories of past pleasures now destroy




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Submitted on 2009-11-24 05:30:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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