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    dots Submission Name: Let's Rundots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232/369/355
    Words: 152
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsLet's Rundots
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    put your tailgate party up.
    stash away your beer.
    we got so much more to see now.
    then what is offered here.

    we can go towards the mountions.
    or head under the stars.
    go fly inside a volcanoe.
    or get caught in eachother's arms.

    flip your finger to passing cars.
    tell them we are brave and all.
    even if the tall trees of Ocala
    can make us feel small.

    smell my hair on your shoulder.
    see the moonlight hit my eyes.
    they shine with all my love and excitment.
    much more than you realize.

    pack those bags of yours or go without.
    we are western bound.
    the train or planes can go without us.
    we can walk without a sound.

    so come away with me.
    with you everytime is fun.
    grab my hands and take off your shoes.
    and let's run.









    Submitted on 2009-11-24 11:14:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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