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    dots Submission Name: Tumble Tucker Bumble Beedots
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    Author: Mud
    ASL Info:    18/f/India
    Elite Ratio:    2.73 - 55/98/57
    Words: 133
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 880
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    Bytes: 949



    Description:
       For my cat, Mellie.


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    dotsTumble Tucker Bumble Beedots
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    i see you, puppycat
    in your cardboard den
    your big, big eyes
    glaring out from
    the darkness

    when you stretch out your paw
    to whack my nose
    it's the weirdest
    most perfect combination
    of contempt and love
    that only a cat can achieve

    sometimes
    i don't know if you're there
    or not

    sometimes i know
    by your quiet, distant scratching
    or motionless lump at my feet
    or a muddy glob
    in your litter tray

    and when i think
    that you couldn't tug at my heartstrings
    any more

    you rumble
    and you tumble
    and you blink, slowly

    bimble
    button eyes
    stop nipping at my feet
    with your tail in the air

    and disappearing
    by the time i bend down
    to touch you





    Submitted on 2009-11-24 12:51:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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