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    dots Submission Name: End it alldots
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    Author: Dark Dann
    ASL Info:    18/ Male/ San Diego
    Elite Ratio:    6.44 - 78/67/53
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsEnd it alldots
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    Shot an arrow through the heart.
    don't even waste tearing it apart.
    Go for the gold, go for the win.
    Don't let the fight within
    Control you, rule you,
    Don't let it fool you.
    You can do, end it all.
    End it now
    I don't want to be stuck to the ground.
    I don't want to crawl,
    Just end it all.




    Submitted on 2009-11-24 17:16:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I find my self writing similar pieces its not set towards a select group but can be longer to improve it :)
    | Posted on 2010-02-03 00:00:00 | by bubblegumsweety | [ Reply to This ]


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