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    dots Submission Name: Throught the Yearsdots
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    Author: Linz
    ASL Info:    24/f/Ne
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 86/118/44
    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Depressed
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       Just some thought of a friendship put together... Comments to make it better would be great!


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    dotsThrought the Yearsdots
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    Our friendship seemed to be unendable:
    7th grade we were unlonly
    8th grade no boy could interfear because we were untouchable
    9th grade it was just us, happy being unpopular
    10th grade noone could stand between us we were unseperatable
    Jr. Year noone could hold us down we were unstoppable
    Sr. Year we never hung out we were untalkable

    Look at what the years did to a great friendship, sometimes life seems unlivable without you here.




    Submitted on 2004-07-21 16:48:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Touching and true. Through the years many friends come and go. I was lucky enough to have one constant friend through it all, though wehad long periods of not being on speaking terms. Perhaps the one you're writing about will someday come back into your life. Now as to the writing, there are a couple of small spelling errors, nothing major. I very much like the continuity of the prefix "un." Obviously its a defining feature in the piece and it works well. I also think the closing sentence sums it up nicely. Some people might think its unnecessary, but I like it there. Overall, very nice.
    | Posted on 2004-07-21 00:00:00 | by Ontlogicalamity | [ Reply to This ]


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