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    dots Submission Name: Immolation of The Flydots
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    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 218
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsImmolation of The Flydots
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    It’s ok

    You can forget me

    Let your heart latch and sway
    On solitary ballroom dances

    And dance on polished oak
    With the reflections of yourself

    Let all those prisons of anguish and love
    Build higher walls
    For yours to be unassailable

    Still I will glide through the essence
    And beat back every raucous element of myself
    To lift
    Even but your heel
    From the plodding necessity
    And defenceless lay that sole upon my neck

    It’s ok

    You can remember me

    Through every word you inspired inside of me
    Beat the exclamations of love

    You can burry yourself if you wish
    I will not halt or stop the shovelling

    Though your nails cling and rake bleeding
    To build higher walls
    For you unshakeable

    I will remain staunch
    Patient till the end of days
    Upon a lighthouse
    While you from your “watchtower”
    No more imagine the beach
    Where floundering heart seeks sustenance

    I cannot draw you from the fat, black and gross
    Or the laws alluded to which
    You define yourself


    I cannot place your foot upon the path

    You my love

    Must do this yourself

    But….

    It’s ok

    You can forget me





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