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    dots Submission Name: Distinguished Lovedots
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    Author: SanctityExposed
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 48/66/40
    Words: 146
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 451
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1047



    Description:
       I found a site while using StumbleUpon, something to help you rhyme. So I thought, what the hay, I'll try it out. Little did I know, this site brought upon a piece, and I didn't have to acquire aid from the rhyming tool. Thank you, strange muses.


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    dotsDistinguished Lovedots
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    The day has come
    To find your peace
    To rest your limbs
    And mind at ease
    To wither slowly
    Along the walls
    To drag limp fingers
    Across the halls
    Your feet are swollen
    Your eyes at rest
    The music's lulling
    Dull roar at best
    Your lungs they rise
    And fall as slowly
    The feel of time
    Unravels lowly
    You sit down here
    Your favorite chair
    Take up the paper
    Pluck nose hairs
    Wrinkled hands
    Push pages so smoothly
    Dark ink on flesh
    The memory soothing
    Weathered eyes
    Glance to and fro
    Your lovely wife
    Knits and sews
    The couch is floral
    A print so accustomed
    You don't mind it now
    Something a must, then
    "The program is on"
    You hear her sigh
    Old, crackling ears
    Look up in time
    "Thank you dear"
    You say with a grin
    She looks at you
    Then the story begins




    Submitted on 2009-11-27 04:35:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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