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    dots Submission Name: An “Order” of Beautydots

    Author: col13x
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 119/300/559
    Words: 339
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsAn “Order” of Beautydots

    Down along the order of beauty

    Bigger boobs
    Less facial hair
    Smaller boobs
    Less make up there

    Down along the order of beauty

    If boobs are so important
    Why aren’t men’s underpants measured
    In cups size, or ball size
    Or extension length-wise
    And weighed by the weight of their elephants trunk

    Down along the order of beauty

    That so far has you analysing critically
    How closely you match
    And meet the ideal

    And as you thumb lick and pick your way
    Through the fashionable pages
    All glossy and lined up for you
    With the perfect bone structures
    Of anorexia
    Strutting their coat-hanger frames down the cat walk
    The idealised wish form
    Of the effeminate men
    Who design clothes
    For women

    ( I could burst out laughing ) Down along the order of beauty

    Down along the order of beauty

    What you buy and sell-out of your perfectly
    To the despicable eye

    Fulsome or thin
    Voluptuous or trim
    By paint and powder
    Lip gloss
    And eye liner
    Push up bra
    And plastic surgery
    Corset of dependence
    To maintain
    You are all
    Scathed and robbed of your beauty

    As if you are some scrubbed clean idealism
    As if there is “a woman of perfection”
    Porn goddess
    Of the rampant sexual

    Down along the order of beauty

    And grace figures behind
    Such lust

    The slender
    The full breasted
    Curvaceous nuances
    Between those curves
    Or the stretched and delicate angles
    Which give lithe, a form

    And a man appreciates what it is
    About the beauty of a woman

    Still a woman

    And nothing to do with any predetermined
    Order of beauty

    “Keep young and beautiful.
    “It’s your duty to be beautiful
    “Keep young and beautiful
    “If you want to be

    ( catchy little jingle )

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