Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Blurdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: throughmyvoice
    ASL Info:    19/f/US of A
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 69/113/51
    Words: 429
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 637
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2761



    Description:
       


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsBlurdots
    -------------------------------------------



    Sometimes, my memories begin to blur
    It's usually when the world's spinning too fast,
    I'm tilting,
    And I hurl
    Because it blurs the lines in my mind that shape your face
    I rage against the miles growing, knowing distance seperates,
    Drowning into oceans, flowing
    In between the trust that dissipates
    I sigh, when I can't remember, each laugh line's particular grace
    My memories blur, and i grow sad
    When I can't recall your face

    I'll stare at my fingers, hoping they remember
    The feel of your bare skin, on which I traced
    The promises that you can't possibly remember
    I never spoke, instead I wrote
    In soft caresses between your shoulder blades
    I stayed awake for hours, just to watch you sleep
    To drink in each breath you slept out
    To memorize each curve of cheek
    And I remember the circles shadowing under my eyes
    But they didn't mean a thing
    I was in your arms, awake, almost every time
    Those were nights when I didn't need to dream

    Sometimes I cry, without knowing the reason
    No storm warning, nowhere to hide
    Outside my window, the skies spread blue
    But those are the days it rains inside
    I think I cry, because it seems
    That the miles are oceans, and the oceans in between
    Are drowning the memories, and fading the dreams
    That I never slept to feel, that I never felt would leave
    Yet it is all I hope for,
    Love I desperately still, and will, believe

    I have a secret in the form of a bag
    It's filled with the sea, and sometimes I get mad
    Because it reminds me of the beginning,
    Which never seemed like it would change
    Not that's it's worse, but the distance is so strange
    And the shells are inside, if I choose to recollect
    Sometimes I sing and they sing back
    Sometimes they're quiet with regret
    No matter what they say, though
    They always help me to reflect
    On the summer I fell in love,
    On a season I'll never forget

    I remember
    And how funny that I feel even stronger
    Despite heartbreak
    And the distance growing longer
    Obstacles were overcome, sacrifices were made
    We bid adieu to the defiant Fall
    Welcoming Spring as a break
    Now, my memory doesn't blur, but my eyes do
    The ocean in my eyes
    Dripping salt on my lips
    The tide is pushing my heart to you
    To you
    Love far away and blurring
    But never ceasing to exist




    Submitted on 2009-11-28 06:58:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    180728

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    phantom limbs written by expiring_touch
    // Seasonal Song written by ShadowParadox
    Journey written by endlessgame23
    The World written by jjd
    Across the bed written by expiring_touch
    Relativity written by poetotoe
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (1) written by endlessgame23
    Birds of a Feather written by poetotoe
    Dream written by closetpoet
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23
    mimicry written by expiring_touch
    Florida's Autumn Solstice written by closetpoet
    Shi written by ShyOne
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth written by endlessgame23
    Coversheets written by TheStillSilence
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    Life is moments written by Ramneet
    Still Perfectly Flawed written by armand
    Carry written by saartha
    prison written by ShyOne
    The Poems Death written by Mepoduo
    More then just goodbye written by faideddarkness
    The Old Mill written by Wolfwatching
    Cover written by saartha
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (2) written by endlessgame23
    Redemption written by poetotoe
    Etiquette written by saartha
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (3) written by endlessgame23
    When Sirens Whisper written by HisNameIsNoMore

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry