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    dots Submission Name: Blurdots

    Author: throughmyvoice
    ASL Info:    19/f/US of A
    Elite Ratio:    3.63 - 69/113/51
    Words: 429
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Sometimes, my memories begin to blur
    It's usually when the world's spinning too fast,
    I'm tilting,
    And I hurl
    Because it blurs the lines in my mind that shape your face
    I rage against the miles growing, knowing distance seperates,
    Drowning into oceans, flowing
    In between the trust that dissipates
    I sigh, when I can't remember, each laugh line's particular grace
    My memories blur, and i grow sad
    When I can't recall your face

    I'll stare at my fingers, hoping they remember
    The feel of your bare skin, on which I traced
    The promises that you can't possibly remember
    I never spoke, instead I wrote
    In soft caresses between your shoulder blades
    I stayed awake for hours, just to watch you sleep
    To drink in each breath you slept out
    To memorize each curve of cheek
    And I remember the circles shadowing under my eyes
    But they didn't mean a thing
    I was in your arms, awake, almost every time
    Those were nights when I didn't need to dream

    Sometimes I cry, without knowing the reason
    No storm warning, nowhere to hide
    Outside my window, the skies spread blue
    But those are the days it rains inside
    I think I cry, because it seems
    That the miles are oceans, and the oceans in between
    Are drowning the memories, and fading the dreams
    That I never slept to feel, that I never felt would leave
    Yet it is all I hope for,
    Love I desperately still, and will, believe

    I have a secret in the form of a bag
    It's filled with the sea, and sometimes I get mad
    Because it reminds me of the beginning,
    Which never seemed like it would change
    Not that's it's worse, but the distance is so strange
    And the shells are inside, if I choose to recollect
    Sometimes I sing and they sing back
    Sometimes they're quiet with regret
    No matter what they say, though
    They always help me to reflect
    On the summer I fell in love,
    On a season I'll never forget

    I remember
    And how funny that I feel even stronger
    Despite heartbreak
    And the distance growing longer
    Obstacles were overcome, sacrifices were made
    We bid adieu to the defiant Fall
    Welcoming Spring as a break
    Now, my memory doesn't blur, but my eyes do
    The ocean in my eyes
    Dripping salt on my lips
    The tide is pushing my heart to you
    To you
    Love far away and blurring
    But never ceasing to exist

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