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    dots Submission Name: The Eleventh Hour (doubt)dots
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    Author: shortandre
    Elite Ratio:    2 - 3/9/15
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsThe Eleventh Hour (doubt)dots
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    In the eleventh hour
    of the twenty second day
    that is when it all goes away
    astray
    the thoughts
    of yesterday's happiness
    sunshiny clouds fade
    to seafoam gray

    Nothing is as it should be
    yet though I sit here
    on the precipice of
    accomplishment
    I fall back
    into a haze of
    self deprivation
    self determent
    that undermines my
    determination
    I am my own enemy

    I do not need you

    in this hour
    this eleventh hour
    of the twenty second day
    beneath sunless skies
    of seafoam gray
    nothing is as it should be
    and nothing
    is
    what it seems
    to be...

    Illusion
    and nothing more.





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