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Such a thing as a Knight?


Author: Lincesa
ASL Info:    15/female/the kitchen
Elite Ratio:    4.55 - 11 /14 /14
Words: 121
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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I have no idea.


Such a thing as a Knight?



He could make your dreams come true,
He could break you through and through.
That kiss once said to be the cure,
soon turned into an obscure blur.

He could make your dreams come true,
He could break you through and through.
Fatality in the hands of the Knight,
he grips you with a frightening sight.

He could make your dreams come true,
He could break you through and through.
Poison is the seed he sets,
Death is the long lost bet.

He will make your dreams come true,
He will drug you, till you can't find you.
Is there such a thing as a Knight?
Only the darkest of plights could save you from Lucifer's Knight.




Submitted on 2009-11-29 03:36:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Woa unexpected twist in the end there, caught me off guard. I like the overall structure of the piece but i dont like the repetition, that is just my opinion though, others might love it again. Quite an interesting read, i am sure you enjoyed writing this. Thanks for sharing it with us.
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| Posted on 2009-11-29 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]


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