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    dots Submission Name: Can We?dots
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    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
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    dotsCan We?dots
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    I've come to terms with my past
    I've accepted my wrong doings
    I know there are consequences forthcoming

    Yet how do I just "accepted" the pain I've caused?
    The disarray I have put upon you?
    How can I swallow all this sorrow my actions have caused you?

    Will we make it through?
    Can we still lean on one another we once did?
    Are you right for me?
    Am I right for you?

    Am I willing to stay by your side & endlessly be reminded of my painful actions?
    Yet another selfish thought,
    "thinking of myself and what I can/cannot do?"
    nevertheless is it possible?

    Attentional or not I am constantly reminded,
    as you are as well
    Neither of us speak of it

    but

    we

    K N O W




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      Yep, know this so well.... honestly written Jackz :)
    | Posted on 2009-12-10 00:00:00 | by col13x | [ Reply to This ]


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