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    dots Submission Name: Fight for youdots
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    Author: brokenbylove
    ASL Info:    26/m/australia
    Elite Ratio:    1.27 - 63/298/259
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsFight for youdots
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    Am I made of glass cause you see right through me
    Are you made of stone cause you just don't care
    You wont take risks you just wont dare
    I guess your heart is cold
    I guess your life has been put on hold
    All the things we could share
    But still you won't put yourself out there
    I try help you smile
    But even though I fight
    I can't get through your walls are so high
    Your failing fast, Fading away
    I don't know what to do
    I just can't get through to you
    Your gasping for air
    Even when your free to breathe
    Over and over I try to leave
    I can't let you go
    I can't let you die
    I've seen my mistake
    I'm trying to fix the wrong
    It's too late to set you free
    Maybe I should just let you be
    No matter how much it kills me... 




    Submitted on 2009-11-29 11:09:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It's alright. Sounds like some other poems of heart break I have read but it's alright.
    | Posted on 2009-12-02 00:00:00 | by ZombieWarrior | [ Reply to This ]
      i loved it, the only thing you could fix are the spelling mistakes and a missing word or two
    | Posted on 2009-11-30 00:00:00 | by Alilia | [ Reply to This ]


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