That white light penetrates
the clouds, lighting up
my soul to light the way for my journey.
I shield myself with armor,
boasting of the shine it brings to all.
I am the knight that rescues damsels.
Please believe I mean well though I
fall from my horse and fall
to the ground before the dragon,
slowly licking its lips and eager
to take me down into its belly.
I will catch the light of heaven in my sword
and weighty shield to
protect the lonely damsels and
play the role of God.
| Its like something batman would write while wasting away in an insane asylum because he ran out of batorangs and couldn't catch up to a sodomizing, womanizing, joker. Sorry for your luck. Perhaps if you wore a paper bag over your head and your partner used a dental dam when descending to your vag, you wouldn't have such unfortunate outcomes.|
|| Posted on 2009-12-06 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ] || What is basting? Ive never heard that before, interesting word though hmm. I enjoyed the overall content but i feel you have instilled your current emotions (drained? Demotivated?) somewhat into this.|
"like some lantern" this just does not fit for some reason, feels under described or under emphasised or something. I like the rythm but you failed to capture me superbly like in previous works, was this a forced write or am i just falling off the pot here?
Anyways i give it a 7, compared to previous works, a 6.
|| Posted on 2009-11-30 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ] || This was an interesting write and very funny because it reminds me so much of a piece called Triumph? that I wrote, should check it out because from reading this I think you'd like it. This does seem very short for how much it feels like it wants to say. I enjoyed the mood that this gave off, and the end was a nice touch too. Well, keep it up||| Posted on 2009-11-30 00:00:00 | by bkj43 | [ Reply to This ] |