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    dots Submission Name: Mirrordots

    Author: dthforeverpain8
    ASL Info:    17/Female/TMON
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 112/217/289
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Just a little something for english - rather deep, it cuts to the core, and its so very true.

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    Broken faced girl
    So many tears
    Why is it you hide
    From everyone but me?

    Alone in your room
    I seem your only friend
    So why am I seen
    As the enemy?

    And as you break yourself in two
    Empty fragments on the floor
    I am the only witness
    The voice you cannot ignore

    What have you gained
    To live this way?
    Watch the world in circles
    Patience turning gray

    Now your reflection’s fading
    With every new mistake
    Each breath, fogs my surface
    Bringing you closer to your last

    Look back at the past
    Stark confusion – out of grasp
    Even your reflection lies
    Is honesty too much to ask?

    Submitted on 2009-11-30 15:11:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow, I like very much. I am a little slow, it took me a while to understand at first, making me have to start over. The title is perfect, I wouldn't have understood the poem without it. Your teacher better like this, A+.
    | Posted on 2009-12-01 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]

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