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    dots Submission Name: Hopedots
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    Author: MyWorld
    ASL Info:    21/M/IN
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 76/99/87
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsHopedots
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    Wishes don't come true
    And, dreams rarely do
    Suicide is but the death of hope
    And, that is true
    Life is pain
    And, that is also true
    The thoughts life brought
    Were carefully thought time due
    And, in the end, all it costed
    Was to cause the loss of you
    And, again, an awful sense
    that all has since gone askew
    Because when, I ought to have known
    Better than to have fought
    But, I was wrong.
    In everything I thought I knew
    I was caught and brought into
    An invisible web of no logic or rationale
    Incomprehensible, unsolvable by cognitive skill




    Submitted on 2009-11-30 23:57:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very true..very good write.
    | Posted on 2010-11-11 00:00:00 | by love_confusion | [ Reply to This ]
      mmm At first i was like huh but this is really good I enjoy the end the most! but over all I like! Your right you know... Life is Pain... and Sucide is hope... its sad but true

    Jackz
    | Posted on 2010-07-30 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]
      Itís interesting, itís like the darker definition of hope, a vision with no answer, a light growing dim, the after effects of what hope would become for most. Something so believable in the back of your mind it canít be right but you continue until it hits you and everything you spent to work toward or accomplish gone, wasted. I like your choice of words and twist of sentences; itís like your drawing with them. It was good.


    Faid
    | Posted on 2009-12-02 00:00:00 | by faideddarkness | [ Reply to This ]


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