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    dots Submission Name: Found in the Whisperdots
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    Author: Colten
    ASL Info:    19/Man?lol/U of I
    Elite Ratio:    3.05 - 62/99/43
    Words: 195
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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    Description:
       This is based (loosely inspired) on a bible passage


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    dotsFound in the Whisperdots
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    Walking in a quite quick pace
    The Earth is hard below my feet
    So calluses form continuously
    The brutal Earth is nothing though
    Compared to the soil my heart treads
    And the violence of the Nighlty air
    The Wind who whips like forty lashes
    The World pulls silently my heartstrings
    Like a great puppeteer and his puppet
    Though those around me keep walking
    Friends moving at their own paces
    My Dream Self falls to hands and knees
    Bellowing into the knife-like chill
    Oh why cruel World Oh Puppeteer
    You pull my heartstrings so
    But I keep walking silently slowly
    And no one knows about my Death
    The Winds knows though and his laughter
    He laughs often as I die often
    Churning into the darkness he howls

    But Wait

    Beyond the laughter another sound
    My Death halts a moment
    It is low it is meek it is tiny it is there
    I found a whisper in the Night breeze
    A voice appart from the Wind
    And it tickles my eardrums gloriously
    I now know the difference
    Between feeling lonely and feeling alone

    I am never Alone
    For You are with Me.




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