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    dots Submission Name: Based on a Rocky Relationshipdots
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    Author: charmedidentity
    ASL Info:    23/F/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    6.9 - 864/897/406
    Words: 240
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 501
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    Description:
       How many people have the boy meets girl, boy falls in love with girl, boy lives happily ever after with girl fairytale..... with no problems in the middle?????

    I just hope everyday life is a strong enough foundation.


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    dotsBased on a Rocky Relationshipdots
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    Based on a rocky foundation

    Our fairytale is not at the top of the charts
    Of the best stories ever to be known.
    It feels like a tale better to be left untold;
    It still is the story of you and me.

    What can I say about this house?
    Weíve built it with our bare hands.
    Weíve built this with our hearts in mind
    Not knowing where the ending might lead
    If there was even any ending to begin with.

    What can I say about this foundation?
    It wasnít the best ground to start with.
    It wasnít something that took time to plan
    We just jumped right at it without a thought
    We didnít think it will crumble back to the ground.

    What can I say about the basic structure?
    Itís simple but itís the best Iíve ever seen!
    Itís the simplest things I fell in love with,
    It didnít require me to swallow my nerves
    Because I knew the results were mind blowing.

    What can I say about our love story?
    Weíve nurtured it with our bare hands
    And made it into the best ground possible
    By keeping our core emotions simple,
    Filling the holes without knowing we did it.

    Our fairytale is not at the top of the charts;
    We do not have an illusion of perfection.
    All we have are two people building together;
    A foundation based on everyday experiences.




    Submitted on 2009-12-01 21:23:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the way you tell the story and describing the way things happen and progress but i read a kind of doubt between the lines and a hope that all will be wel in the end despite portraying all in a good light. I like the piece and the flow but it seemed a bit bland to me as if you could add some more feeling or description to color it in. A good write. Thanks for sharing.

    :-)

    -Svw
    | Posted on 2009-12-02 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]


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