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    dots Submission Name: Dear Lifedots
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    Author: UnderlinedInRed
    ASL Info:    18/f/PA
    Elite Ratio:    4.24 - 196/262/123
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsDear Lifedots
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    Dear Life,
    Iím rather confused. Hoping you could help me out.
    Iím trying to remember the years, yet all I can see are patchy images. Its blurry back there, and the farther I look the dimmer it gets. So I try to recount the years, one by one and then memories start to creep back. Not all the memories, just a few, enough to satiate my needs for a small while. I count back from now: newly 18 and entirely unsure of why I am here, how I got here or what it all means to me.
    Life, Iím scared. Iím scared I have done something wrong, that this isnít the journey I was meant to take or maybe I am not looking at it in the right way. I am afraid that I canít be happy again, if I ever was. I am afraid that all these words people are shoving down my throat of insanity and depression are catching on to me and I donít want to be that person. I donít want to be depressed, Life. Please donít let me, I have gone too far for that. I know that much.
    Still walking beside you,
    Miranda.




    Submitted on 2009-12-01 22:27:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yes turning 18 is a scary bit, getting ready for the whole new world before you and not quite sure how to approach it, i think you show some potential here but you need to polish it. The piece started rather weakly but grew in strength nearing the middle. I like the way you wrote it without getting too angsty and just stating your fears and desires. Keep writing, i am sure improvement will follow :)

    -Svw
    | Posted on 2009-12-02 00:00:00 | by Clayman | [ Reply to This ]


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