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    dots Submission Name: Used to call me yours.dots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232/369/355
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Lostfriend
    Total Views: 405
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       " when you go, would you even turn to say. I don't love you like I loved you yesterday."
    -My chemical romance-


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    dotsUsed to call me yours.dots
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    You used to call me honey.
    how you loved me to no end.
    you used to say you couldn't live without me.
    that we would always be friends.

    You used to call me the sunlight.
    told me how I shone.
    you used to look me in the eyes
    and say " don't leave me alone"

    you used to say that we would be together
    that nothing would get in our ways.
    our paths intertwined for a reason.
    but you took yours away.

    you used to call me your heart
    which I was too vain and tore.
    You call her my names now.
    but you used to call me yours.




    Submitted on 2009-12-02 08:38:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is amazingly well-written.
    there's parts about it that speak to me from a empathetic POV
    i've felt this before.
    sorry you had to go through it too.
    | Posted on 2009-12-07 00:00:00 | by SonOfDamascus | [ Reply to This ]


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