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    dots Submission Name: Little Sheepdots
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    Author: Demon__666
    ASL Info:    20/f/Oklahoma
    Elite Ratio:    2.45 - 312/359/124
    Words: 136
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 554
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 791



    Description:
       I wrote this about someone who USED to be my friend.


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    dotsLittle Sheepdots
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    You Have Done Nothing But Make Me HATE you,
    How Fucking Proud Does That make you?

    You Have Become Such A Little Sheep,
    and Oh Hunny! what dosent kill you makes you weak.

    Your Blood for their sympathy,
    To you a fair trade.

    Was it all worth it,
    The Pathetic Scars you have made?

    Oh My!, Oh No!, Oh Look!, Oh Surprise!, another lie ,
    I hope they hurt you so bad in the end you FUCKING cry!

    MORE drama, it seems your nothing more,
    You should cut too deep and just die!

    Grow up, wake up, make up, Fake up some more,
    Throw up, Toke up, dope up , drink up.

    Fuck up, Cut up, Whore up, Choke up, Shut UP!
    Do as they say, OBEY LITTLE SHEEP!




    Submitted on 2009-12-02 09:59:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Wow a very dark piece of poetry here, the grammar was flawless as far as i can see but the lyrics are a little lifeless so it feels more like a rant, keep up the good work and maybe even try to write a story,

    Also this poem seems to depict someone fighting with someone who was a friend but because of their bad habits and forcefully low mood the friend has gotten the main character (if its okay to say that with poetry) into a heap of trouble.

    I could see you making a great dramatic story out of this simple poem, good job once again.
    | Posted on 2009-12-02 00:00:00 | by HeWantsToKnow | [ Reply to This ]


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