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    dots Submission Name: Elegy to everyday lifedots

    Author: ParanoidParadox
    ASL Info:    22/m/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 89/92/41
    Words: 141
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsElegy to everyday lifedots

    They lock their doors and close their blinds
    Filling their television minds
    Afraid to even look outside
    For fear of ever judging eyes
    Feeding on every single lie
    Not once gazing at the sky
    One can't help questioning why
    They lack introspection to look inside

    Outside, the planet wheeps
    Echoing through the empty streets
    Screaming beneath the concrete
    Her warning we do not heed
    Burdened by the media fleet
    Beating us down into our seats
    This serenade to soul's defeat
    Gone is any want to be free

    This is your life passing you by
    And yet you want to run and hide

    Mother, why do they lie to me?
    Why do they want me too blind to see?
    Why do they run at the sight of me?
    As truth erodes, so goes society

    Submitted on 2009-12-02 14:03:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ah. Society is this.
    Amazing write I think its great the way it is!

    | Posted on 2009-12-05 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      wonderful!! a whole new point of view and its terrfying.. great poem. i have to accept that is exactly the way the media is today. the concept is good, it brings lot of interest...
    | Posted on 2009-12-03 00:00:00 | by rsujith | [ Reply to This ]

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