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    dots Submission Name: The Hardest Hit To My Heart (Thank You)dots
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    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsThe Hardest Hit To My Heart (Thank You)dots
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    probably the hardest thing to take
    for her
    was granted...

    a smile was tucked in her pocket,
    her love--- in a locket, inside her chest
    her past now off in the distance,
    I'm wishing her well... isn't her heart at rest?

    I last saw her sophmore year
    such a soft core year
    My face was wet for no reason
    (*Dummy, those are tears*)
    looking back on poems
    knowin' I'd never see her again
    showin' cards face up
    but never meet her again...
    seeing how she created me
    as a writer, and cypher
    every feeling I ever had
    through, and by her
    wishing i could only pride her
    make her proud of me
    you may ask--- why her?
    because undoubtedly

    she is the hardest hit to my heart

    I'm thankful for the experience

    Because now matter what I do,
    my bloodtype is AB




    Submitted on 2009-12-02 14:22:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      NICE LOL I like (*Dummy, those are tears*) great write buddy keep it up very entertaining about to read another one of your poems :) Pretty sure it is just an entertaining and thanx for the comment on my poem You Weren't There or something like that lol peace & stay safe...
    | Posted on 2009-12-21 00:00:00 | by Cordell | [ Reply to This ]
      mmm different but you know what???!!!! I LOVE YOUR STYLE PROPS TO YOU!!!!!

    jACKZ
    | Posted on 2009-12-05 00:00:00 | by jackz | [ Reply to This ]


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